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Re: My Intrest In Writing (needs help on conclusion!)
I belong walking the halls of the Alabama School of Fine Arts; that is the place where I can turn my fantasies into realities and goals into achievements. I hope ...
Jan 17, 2010 -
Re: deleted
Even in scripts, the beginning is supposed to pull the reader, or audience in this case, into the story. I could only read 'til Max comes in. (1) The exchange ...
Jan 17, 2010 -
Re: I am more of ink than solid stuff.
Whoa. Your poem is probably everything I've been trying to do in my poems, like trying to get an idea out that makes sense in an elegant way or actually ...
Jan 3, 2010 -
Re: Aja, Aja
Woot! First post! My Biology I class just finished giving presentations on different diseases and their symptoms and treatments, and I remembered what jaundice is! Not that you care, but ...
Dec 10, 2009 -
Re: Universius
I'm learning about poetry in English right now, so hopefully this review isn't terrible. This poem is really good. I like how there's no meter because it gives you a ...
Nov 21, 2009 -
Re: Once Upon a Time
Once upon a time, there was a lady called Cassandra. If this is set in high school, then I believe the "lady" should be turned into "girl". No wait - ...
Sep 7, 2009 -
Re: A vampire, a clutz, a REALLY bad singer, and two random girl
*Bella runs into Edward's arms but trips over his foot and slams into a wall* Oh, Bella, how you cease to amaze me with your ridiculous clumsiness. *Irishfire and Urface112 ...
Aug 10, 2009 -
Re: Unloveable
I would suggest going back over the story to comb for grammar mistakes. It was hard for me to read this. The dialogue was a little forced in my opinion. ...
Aug 6, 2009 -
Re: Disclosure
Showers were both pleasant and painful, though I had gotten used to the painful part after a few weeks of having to deal with it. If the most recent scars ...
Jul 30, 2009 -
Re: Twilight : The real story
Besides the profuse cursing and drugs, this is exactly the same thing Meyers did. I had done the same thing with another fan fiction. It will get so much more ...
Jun 23, 2009 -
Re: Heart of the Irish ( title may change)
Sweet! I'm the first one! XD He was looking, searching for her. His obsession with her was to the point of terrifying . She crouched down lower into the darkness ...
Mar 23, 2009 -
Re: River flows in you
Hey, I'm MJ. Can someone stop a river from running? Maybe with a dam or a deck. Life is like a river. It runs its course with it ending at ...
Mar 23, 2009 -
Re: Little Miss Photogenic- CHAPTER 5
More Paragraph Splitting: :D Chapter Five Ryder ripped his lips off mine and shoved me away. I was still standing there shocked, my arms still holding the shape of his ...
Mar 23, 2009 -
Re: Little Miss Photogenic. CHAPTER 4
Paragraph Splitting: :D Chapter Four It took us about 30 minutes to reach the mystery destination. Adrenaline pumping through my veins the whole way there, the sheer speed brought the ...
Mar 23, 2009 -
Re: Little Miss Photogenic- CHAPTER 3 - Edited.
I'm going to separate your paragraphs again. Chapter Three My eyes nearly fell out of my head. My hands fluttered uselessly over his beautifully shattered body, it was as if ...
Mar 23, 2009
